The Urban Poetry Challenge thread

Discussion in 'books, films, TV, radio & writing' started by ShiftyBagLady, Apr 2, 2014.

  1. Pickman's model

    Pickman's model Every man and every woman is a star

    sojourner's filled with jealousie
    because s/he missed the poetry
     
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  2. sojourner

    sojourner Where's me readers?

    She - SHE!

    I can't believe you still didn't know that.
     
  3. Ceej

    Ceej Where is my mind?

    It was utterly immense, sojourner - 7-30 till after 11 and my old mate, Atila the Stockbroker was there!! Ginger John and Janine Booth were brilliant, as was Atila. Spend next weeks' grocery money on poetry book and T shirts - who needs food :D
    Talk about the cream of the crop....I'll not see a better night than that.
     
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  4. sojourner

    sojourner Where's me readers?

    Fantastic!! :D :D Hahaa - well, yeh, not often you get them all together in the same place is it? Nice one :D
     
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  5. Pickman's model

    Pickman's model Every man and every woman is a star

    i don't know how that errant / crept in
     
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  6. scifisam

    scifisam feck! arse! girls! drink!

    I was looking for a thread on which to post a poem and ask for feedback, but since it's in a sonnet form, and most of you seem to think writing to a form is worse than Hitler, I think this is probably not the best place for it. I really like some of the ones posted here, esp Dotty's personified April and May K's one about parenting. :)
     
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  7. ShiftyBagLady

    ShiftyBagLady Thinks she is a flower to be looked at

    I like sonnets, PM me if you don't want to post it up here :)
     
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  8. scifisam

    scifisam feck! arse! girls! drink!

    Ok, Ty!
     
  9. ShiftyBagLady

    ShiftyBagLady Thinks she is a flower to be looked at

    Have got a blog that I'll be putting my poetry on, follow me follow me follow me follow me but don't lose your grip....
    parataxis.wordpress.com
     
  10. May Kasahara

    May Kasahara thoughts start with a laser sound

    AS it's National Poetry Day and all, here's one that I started working on and then forgot all about :oops: so it's still well rough, like.

    ROUND ROBIN

    It’s been a bad year for the children,
    passed between hands that couldn’t do enough
    and hands that do too much,
    awash, away, among the waves
    of shock, salt, cars
    traffic
    between states
    they do not, cannot recognise.

    It’s been a bad year for the children
    while our goods and gains continue to grow
    high as the waves, fat as butter,
    wasted as the grain
    we burn on our shores.
    Life-jacket red,
    the sun sinks
    gilding a path across choppy waters
    leavened with the dead.

    It’s been a bad year for the children,
    they’re not safe around water,
    too much of it
    or not enough,
    we never seem to get it right
    we clench them up too tight
    or let them roam too far
    we pass them by, pass them between
    our borders, boundaries, frightened by a tale
    of a stranger in a car.

    It’s been a bad year for the children
    as they bend and break,
    tear and tell
    and no one comes.
    They seem to think they can just
    go on growing,
    all that food! All that attention,
    How much do they need,
    really? How much will they bleed?
    We try to keep them in
    keep them down, contained, we beat them thin
    like hammered gold leaf
    till they’re a face smiling out of our paper
    can you die of a broken hip
    my baby’s moving not breathing
    poor little thing someone took her

    We never seem to get the information we need.

    Yes, it’s been a bad year for the children
    and the teenagers don’t
    seem to want to talk
    anymore, thumbing
    that stupid broken language
    from palm to palm like they’re
    blind deaf and dumb.
    We can’t seem to get through to them
    where they’re going wrong.
    Maybe things will be better
    when we send this around
    next year?
     
  11. Pickman's model

    Pickman's model Every man and every woman is a star

    2016

    it's been a bad year for the children
    a much worse one for the slebs
    the weather's not met expectations
    but it's better than being dead

    it's been a bad year for the children
    hearing sounds of years gone by
    bowie and prince are not forgotten
    when they hear them the children sigh

    it's been a bad year for the children
    a much worse one for dead slebs
    the dead pool lists are all filled in
    and the children all go 'meh'

    Badgers
     
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  12. DotCommunist

    DotCommunist my world is fire and blood

    When selene hangs yellow crescent
    I see a witches hook nose, inner curve.
    The cackle forms and I laugh too.
    Friendly moon.

    If the lady is full white, round, austere.
    I reflect sober as she, for now.
    Full bodied sky fruit with a smallpox veneer.
    Stern Moon

    Should she wax or wane the balance,
    I follow that too. Shrink or swell.
    Faces half shadowed, her and I


    Once, just once, she wore red for me.
    Normal phenomena they say. But
    I know better, selene knows better.
    Blood moon
     
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  13. Ceej

    Ceej Where is my mind?

    Had the very great pleasure of meeting sojourner on Saturday night, and great to see the not-very-well ShiftyBagLady. Soj is such a brilliant performer - already loved her poetry but awesome to see them live. Joy Frank was great too...though turning around to see a sea of Donald Trumps will feed my nightmares for some time!
     
  14. ShiftyBagLady

    ShiftyBagLady Thinks she is a flower to be looked at

    I'm glad I made it, it was touch and go for a while there but I had a great time. Must admit that I felt a bit like a fan as I knew almost all of sojourner poems but I loved the performance of them. It's a cliche to say she brings the writing to life but I think that's the best description; her performances are so full of life and energy that it makes the words more potent. Highly, highly rated.

    Joy Frank was a joy to behold, I loved her silly and her serious and her moving poem about her son and her rap, those were my favourites. I posted a video of the trump thing on Facebook, hope she gets to see it.

    Lovely to see you too Ceej, always a pleasure :)
     
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  15. wtfftw

    wtfftw Well-Known Member

    I'm sad and sorry not to have made it. :( Had a migraine.
     
  16. sojourner

    sojourner Where's me readers?

    Thanks so much for coming ShiftyBagLady and Ceej - and Ron Merlin too! It's Joy France btw, not Frank :D And yeh. she really is something! Housmans was really quite reserved compared to the Brixton gig, and I'm afraid I got even shoutier because of it :D
     
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  17. Ceej

    Ceej Where is my mind?

    Joy FRANCE...no wonder I couldn't find her anywhere! *slaps head*

    The shouty bits were the best bits, sojourner! :D
     
  18. Cheesypoof

    Cheesypoof Fuck off Noddy Banned

    we need to get this poetry thread going again. sojourner? May?
     
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  19. albionism

    albionism A successful virus clinging to a speck of mud.

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  20. sojourner

    sojourner Where's me readers?

    Sorry Cheesypoof - never saw that post of yours until now. It's prob best to tag me if you want me :)

    albionism - sommat you want to share, mate?
     
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  21. albionism

    albionism A successful virus clinging to a speck of mud.

    I put a short poem up, but was a bit
    embarrassed so I deleted it.
     
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  22. DotCommunist

    DotCommunist my world is fire and blood

    I saw a mouse, I didn't care for it.
    Beady eyed arrogance, shocked still twitcher,
    coiled to run and run

    There was a cat, tom by build,
    studied lazy contempt,
    coiled to rend and tear.

    The Red Kites came early this year,
    to wheel in updrafts, dive to the London Road.
    Their easy carrion-call existence

    At home a small life rests, beady eyed,
    arrogant with youth, with teeth
    and fur and insatiable curiosity.

    I care for it.
     
  23. sojourner

    sojourner Where's me readers?

    Don't be embarrassed! Put it up again :)

    Nicely done dotty :thumbs:
     
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  24. sojourner

    sojourner Where's me readers?

  25. DotCommunist

    DotCommunist my world is fire and blood

    I could do a luadation all day long but I couldn't bring myself to air it. One to be read at my funeral to remind weeping eyes of what a smug bastard I could be at times
     
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  26. stethoscope

    stethoscope Well-Known Member

    A bump only really because we went to see Janine Booth last night, she was aces :cool:
     
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  27. sojourner

    sojourner Where's me readers?

    Heh - me and Janine are doing a gig together this Saturday as it happens, in Otley Labour Rooms! She is fantastic, agreed. When we did a gig last year, it was like meeting the southern version of me :D so am proper looking forward to this one!
     
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  28. Ceej

    Ceej Where is my mind?

    She's brilliant (as is sojourner) - dream team - come to London!!!
     
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  29. sojourner

    sojourner Where's me readers?

    I am hoping to return to That London, possibly in October, and if I do, we will deffo be doing a gig together :)
     
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  30. Pickman's model

    Pickman's model Every man and every woman is a star

    march 2016

    hawking's dead but cliff still lives
    i'm not sure there are many positives
    nigel farage lives - now there's a pity
    his slow painful death would not be shitty
     
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